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The Most Advanced Machine

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I bet that you would like to have a mower for your lawn
That hardly needed input and could run while you were gone.

I have a few fine models so, if you want my advice,
I'll go through some key features. I'm sure that will suffice.

I bet that you have never seen machines that looked this good.
You can even choose the color – you don't have to – but you could.

Not using toxic compounds, it's not harmful to the earth.
Now tell me, how much do you think something like this is worth?

Don't worry - you don't need to call technicians for repair.
It can fix itself - though it's slow, so please don't stare.

Still, want a newer model when the current one's worn out?
There's a built-in option, I assure without a doubt.

It only runs on water. What more could someone ask?
Invent something that's this complex – it is no easy task!

And if all this were not enough, it doubles as a pet.
Now, my friend, I have to ask… have you figured it out, yet?

                                ~Gregory A. Conner II
...well?




Looking at this from the perspective of a future Mechanical Engineer... God's a much better inventor than I ever will be!



For critiquers:
Does the poem make you appreciate how truly amazing animals can be?
How is the word choice?
Is the poem enjoyable to read, or just kind of "there"?

Most importantly, what are your general thoughts? I'd be pleased to hear them!

Edit: I fixed a mistake and changed one of the lines for clarity as advised below!

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